Hippocamplus My Second Memory

Expression

Writing

Some recommendations from Sportscience:

  • i.e. and e.g. only within parenthesis (is that a thing?)
  • aim for economy.
  • However or synonyms at most once per paragraph.
  • while/since for time related stuff, not instead of whereas/although/because.
  • Don’t start sentence with because/as/since.
  • Adverb after verb.

What I noticed that I’m doing wrong sometimes:

  • aim to verb instead of aim at verb-ing.
  • Using simple be instead of “fancy” verbs (e.g. represent).
  • Shorter sentences. E.g. … This explains… instead of …, which explains….
  • Place such as at end of the sentence when possible.
  • The verb represent might be a faux-ami.

Grammarly lessons

  • less which, and more that
    • sequencing data produces data *that* tools can use for...
  • avoid separating to <verb>
    • to better study -> to study better
    • to better characterize -> to characterize better
    • to quickly produce XX -> to produce XX quickly
  • in order to -> to
  • less of will be verb-ing and more will verb
  • less wordy
    • in particular -> particularly
    • take into account X -> account for X
  • not only X but also Y -> X and Y
  • X of the Y -> Y X
  • with the verb-ing -> verb
    • help with the interpretation of X -> help interpret X
  • that is/are ->
  • it is more <adj> to verb than to verb -> verb-ing is more <adj> than verb-ing
  • the <noun> of X -> <verb>-ing X
    • the identification of variants -> identifying variants
  • X, which <verb> -> X, <verb>ing
  • will have a large impact on -> will greatly impact
  • In the near future -> Soon
  • get better -> improve
  • in the years to come -> in the coming years
  • to ensure that the -> to ensure the

Synonyms

  • identify: pinpoint

General

Some snippets that could be useful.

Starting the sentence

Typically, … \(~~\bullet~~\) In principle, … \(~~\bullet~~\) Occasionally, … \(~~\bullet~~\) For example, … \(~~\bullet~~\) In X, Y … \(~~\bullet~~\) As a result, … \(~~\bullet~~\) Indeed, … \(~~\bullet~~\) In this regard, … \(~~\bullet~~\) Surprisingly, it appears that … \(~~\bullet~~\) Although X, … \(~~\bullet~~\) Despite X, … \(~~\bullet~~\) Conversely,… \(~~\bullet~~\) In contrast,… \(~~\bullet~~\) Generally speaking, X with Y are more likely to engage in Z

Explanation

This calculation is based on the fact that … \(~~\bullet~~\) … : that is, … \(~~\bullet~~\) X (namely, XX)

Not sure

…, possibly via X \(~~\bullet~~\) X may result in Y \(~~\bullet~~\) These properties probably explain why … \(~~\bullet~~\) … occasionally cause X through Y

Opening

… offer valuable models for studying … \(~~\bullet~~\) The study of X offers an alternative source of information on Y that … \(~~\bullet~~\) Finally, an interesting question is whether … \(~~\bullet~~\) Given that X, it would be interesting to examine … \(~~\bullet~~\) These studies beg for more systematic analyses to assess X

Nice expression/style

X may have a greater propensity to … \(~~\bullet~~\) … but, intriguingly, only under X and Y conditions. \(~~\bullet~~\) … may also be helpful to … \(~~\bullet~~\) X is based, in part, on … \(~~\bullet~~\) …, which, in turn, … \(~~\bullet~~\) Together, these data suggest a model in which … \(~~\bullet~~\) These data are consistent with a X model… \(~~\bullet~~\) … through myriad of mechanisms, including X. \(~~\bullet~~\) … it is often coined the guardian of the genome because of … \(~~\bullet~~\) …, which arose …, …

Introduce the second part of a sentence

…, showing that… \(~~\bullet~~\) …, suggesting … \(~~\bullet~~\) …, which suggests it … \(~~\bullet~~\) …, whereas …

Introduction/reviews

It is only in the past few years that the pervasiveness of X has been appreciated. \(~~\bullet~~\) According to the X/current model, … \(~~\bullet~~\) … have uncovered a staggering quantity of … \(~~\bullet~~\) This is a tell-tale signature of many … \(~~\bullet~~\) “There are three lines of evidence that CNVs contribute to risk for SCZ” \(~~\bullet~~\) We conclude the paper with some final discussions \(~~\bullet~~\) Thereafter

Intro the intro

We also examine the multitude of ways through which \(~~\bullet~~\) Recent studies have uncovered myriad of … \(~~\bullet~~\) Several facets of X have been extensively investigated. \(~~\bullet~~\) A number of studies have produced robust … \(~~\bullet~~\) Various methods can be applied to …

Pionner work

… has laid the foundation for the emerging field of … \(~~\bullet~~\) … helped to shed light on X. \(~~\bullet~~\) Several recent studies point to the existence of a previously unrecognized … \(~~\bullet~~\) A first hint at the system came from a series of elegant studies on … \(~~\bullet~~\) Provided the impetus for

Changing subject

Another exciting facet of X is that … \(~~\bullet~~\) Another common route to X is through … \(~~\bullet~~\) Another mechanism by which X can have an impact on Y is through … \(~~\bullet~~\) The second functional theme emerging from analyses of X is the … \(~~\bullet~~\) No less astounding are the results reported by X studies showing that … \(~~\bullet~~\) Recently, several landmark studies have provided support to the four-decade-old hypothesis that …

More

In addition, it has been shown … \(~~\bullet~~\) In one study, X et al. found that … \(~~\bullet~~\) A classic example is X, which … \(~~\bullet~~\) These studies led to a detailed characterization of … \(~~\bullet~~\) This was recently demonstrated by a report showing that …

Closing

There is evidence that all of these processes have contributed to …

Discussion

In spite of X and Y, our understanding of Z remains fragmentary. \(~~\bullet~~\) A huge gap in our understanding of X lies (between) … \(~~\bullet~~\) Whether X (that is, whether XX) remains an open question \(~~\bullet~~\) Regarding X and Y, the emerging consensus posits that … \(~~\bullet~~\) Several factors have been proposed to explain this incongruity. \(~~\bullet~~\) How then can we explain the discrepancy between X and Y? \(~~\bullet~~\) We argue that … \(~~\bullet~~\) The bedrock for future studies

Oral Expression

  • Now as a transition word, e.g. when changing slides.
  • In closing, … to introduce the conclusion slide.
  • I thought I’d start by… starting the introduction.

Advices

  • Don’t be a parrot, aka don’t read the slides and say things differently.
  • Have fun.
  • Make jokes.
  • Articulate.
  • Avoid “people have shown”.
  • Lots of good ideas there:
    • Don’t read the title but say why we care.
    • Put yourself in a “I love this subject” enthusiast mood.
    • Don’t learn your talk, learn your subject. Then you just have to talk about your slides.
    • No conclusions if talk is short.
    • Don’t read acknowledgments.
    • Tell a story, not a list of analysis.
    • Anticipate objections and meet them in advance.
    • Use the pointer only when necessary. No constant waving and circling.
    • No “I hope I convinced you…”. I agree !
    • Avoid putting important information at the bottom.